Bwa ha ha double post!

[cynchick]

Also stolen from everyone.

Pick a paragraph (or any passage less than 500 words) from any fanfic I've written, and comment to this post with that selection. I will then give you a DVD commentary on that snippet: what I was thinking when I wrote it, why I wrote it in the first place, what's going on in the character's heads, why I chose certain words, what this moment means in the context of the rest of the fic, lots of awful puns, and anything else that you'd expect to find on a DVD commentary track.

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[tsukihara.livejournal.com]

Sakura held on to him tightly, not wanting to accept that tomorrow she would have to let him go forever. The moment his strong arms had come around her the tears just wouldn’t stop. He had come to be very important to her. They all had, but she felt her bond with Deidara was special, because he understood her better than the others. Itachi was her lover, and there was an unspoken connection between them, but Deidara was her friend, and she would miss him terribly when he was gone.

A few minutes later she finally loosened her hold around him, though she didn’t let go, and pulled back slightly with another small sniffle. His hand moved from her hair to join the other around her back, fingers unconsciously tightening and pulling her closer to him.

Deidara watched her tear-stained features with an intensity she had never felt from him before. Her stomach fluttered sharply, for though she had never seen him look at her that way, she knew it for what it was. Something stirred within her, something that was best left unexplored. Had it happened earlier, before everything, she may have welcomed this turn, but it was too late now, and she realized that things were going to get very complicated very quickly if they continued to stand there with their arms around each other.

Slowly she disentangled herself, surprised at her reluctance to do so, and his arms returned to his sides as if he was thinking the exact same thing. Unwilling to just walk away and leave things so unresolved between them, she looked at his face again and smiled, which he eventually returned with a small, ironic smirk. “Thank you so much for everything, Deidara.” On a final impulsive indulgence, she leaned in and placed a soft kiss near the corner of his mouth, lingering perhaps a second too long to be entirely innocent. “Goodnight,” she whispered, stepping away at last.

“Goodnight,” he replied quietly. She turned and walked away, scarf in hand, eventually disappearing down the dark hallway. Alone again, he stared at the fire and rubbed the back of his neck with a long, weary sigh, the feel of her soft lips still lingering on his cheek.

One of my all-time favorite moments in Naruto fan fiction. When you wrote this, did you already know there's going to be a sequel?

[cynchick.livejournal.com]

That is one of my absolute favorite moments too. When I began Perception I had already read several ItaSaku fics and saw the (awful) trend of the love triangle with Deidara or Sasuke or whoever, and I firmly decided I was NOT going to do that. And I didn't, really. There was never any overt jealousy or pissing contests between Itachi/Deidara/Kakashi, and Sakura was never torn between any of them. When I plotted the outline for this story, I knew I wanted KakaSaku subtext and an eventual KakaSaku resolution, but I always intended for Deidara and Sakura to just become really close friends.

And then the characters came to life during the process. Deidara and Sakura decided it for me, seriously. They developed this amazing chemistry all on their own. It was so natural and effortless in the writing - it couldn't NOT be that way for them. (All of my DeiSaku fics were extremely easy for me to write because they just. fit.)

So by the time I reached this point in the story, 3 away from the end, I had become a DeiSaku shipper, they occupied my thoughts more often than what I was supposed to be writing, and yeah, the idea for Silver Lining was already pretty firmly rooted in my head.

However, I still made a conscious effort to not go there in THIS fic. They had their moment, but remained platonic to the end and I didn't give any "they shall meet again" sort of hints because that would have diminished the KakaSaku aspect which I felt was just as important.